[wp-trac] [WordPress Trac] #11008: Improve copy of first post to provide useful info and tips

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Fri Oct 23 15:41:30 UTC 2009


#11008: Improve copy of first post to provide useful info and tips
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 Reporter:  demetris     |       Owner:                       
     Type:  enhancement  |      Status:  new                  
 Priority:  normal       |   Milestone:  2.9                  
Component:  General      |     Version:  2.9                  
 Severity:  normal       |    Keywords:  has-patch 2nd-opinion
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Comment(by filosofo):

 I like what you've done overall.  The following thoughts are nitpicky, but
 this content will be read by millions.

 > This is the first post of your website, generated automatically,

 This is obvious and unnecessary information.  How about just "This first
 post contains important information"?

 The combined emphasis and boldface in this phrase should be re-thought:

 > contains '''''important''''' ''and useful information''

 Either emphasize the entire phrase or just the key words.  The combination
 is unnecessary and seems condescending. Also, why do we need to say both
 "useful" and "important"?  Is there content that is one but not the other?

 > Subscribe to the WordPress mailing list for update notifications

 It doesn't make sense to have a <ul> with just one item: in that case it's
 not really a list.  If you just mean to emphasize this sentence then use
 <em> tags or the like.

 > This will help you keep your WordPress site secure and up-to-date

 "This" is somewhat vague.  How about "The notification list informs you
 how to secure and update your WordPress site."

 For the "enjoying the WordPress experience" list, "in" is not the right
 preposition. "Users › Your Profile" either describes navigation hierarchy
 (in which one one item is ''under'' another) or a web page's location,
 which usually has information ''on'' it.

 Also, it would be better to put first the actions that are important to
 the user:

 "Edit your personal information on the Users › Your Profile page."

 The "start publishing" action item should be in the first couple of list
 items, as it's presumably the reason someone set up WordPress.

 How about a link to the support forums?  Could we link the action items to
 their corresponding Codex pages?

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